Audio for VOs are excellent, interview is shot well although his face is a little dark. B-roll is solid but lacks sequences. You also have a part of your video that is repeated. It's evident that you sped up the video to try to get it under the time limit. Do not do that. It's too distracting. It's better to go over and have him sound normal instead of like a chipmunk that speaks too fast. You lack a bridge to go from point 4 to 5. The part about his kids just comes out of nowhere. Maybe it would have best been left out or moved to the front and have him talk about his family first. I like the part about his childhood and how you explained how his parents were teachers too which got him on that path to being a teacher. It flowed well into the next section where we learned about why he came to Hawaii, how it was the closest place to get his teaching degree and yet still not be too far from home. After that though is where the story falls apart. Good job but could have been much better. 2.7 points.